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gets jam in his peanut butter
unintentionally at every use.
doesn't mean a thing, he just needs to
be more careful.
'you need to
be more careful,' we'd tell him. but some things just don't sink.

other things do sink, though.
like boats.
one good example
would be the titanic.

lord knows i'm a righteous man. blameless in his eyes,
for the most part. but he's pissed
'cause i keep sticking my
nose into shit that don't concern me
like air pollution and sewage.
dumpsters in the slums of new york city.

i'm quite rustic in terms of
knowing right and wrong, and what's whole from half.
but jumping trains
never was a problem because i didn't have the
money i needed to live a life.

but we'd tell him not to worry,
because our peanut butter's in our jam, too.
and our jam is a lot harder to kill
then those other folks'.
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*YouInventedMe:iconYouInventedMe: Apr 14, 2008, 11:00:08 PM
isn't this a resubmission?

either way, I like it.

xo!

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~Patches363:iconPatches363: Apr 15, 2008, 5:59:05 AM
I like it, but I'm not sure I see the point to the second stanza, care to enlighten me? Again, good work.

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~Sub-Mixie:iconSub-Mixie: Apr 19, 2008, 7:07:11 AM
I don't understand most of it.
Last stanza's my fav.

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